its really really good. all the rodent tags are sweet. and yes you dont see a lot of them till you get to the end.
powerful punch. i got Nothing from the prompt. tumbleweeds in my mind, so round of applause to you ZD, to wring out something with layers in something so compact
Read it, then read it again closer... I see what you did there, but I also see what you did there. You know how hard this is to pull off? "Don't speak to me of blasphemy man, I'd strike the sun if it insulted me." type shit.
I know you mentioned it being instinctual, but there’s some elements that for sure have had to be picked up. Subconsciously, maybe. That doesn’t take merit from it, just mentioning it cos you should give yourself more credit.
Halfway in I suspected he was a tiny furry guy, but had to read it twice to really see how much you buried it in plain sight. Excellent stuff 😁
Lovely 😄
Finally some mouse representation
he ran up the clock.
punch taker.
Thank you for writing this. It's so good. Imma just go read it again now.
Love this Zani, read it several times and saw unctuous layers. You’ve got skills!
its really really good. all the rodent tags are sweet. and yes you dont see a lot of them till you get to the end.
powerful punch. i got Nothing from the prompt. tumbleweeds in my mind, so round of applause to you ZD, to wring out something with layers in something so compact
Good prose
Read it, then read it again closer... I see what you did there, but I also see what you did there. You know how hard this is to pull off? "Don't speak to me of blasphemy man, I'd strike the sun if it insulted me." type shit.
I do not know how hard this is to pull off.
I know how hard it was to get myself sat down at a screen long enough to write it tho 🙃
“Poor as a church mouse.”
Beautiful closer. Short and sharp.
I know you mentioned it being instinctual, but there’s some elements that for sure have had to be picked up. Subconsciously, maybe. That doesn’t take merit from it, just mentioning it cos you should give yourself more credit.